英語訂正(川口→三木)

2015/11/19
To foster Historical Thinking Skill by Creating Story
Necessary Relationships and Elements of Characters
In historical learning, historical thinking skill is important. This
thinking is an ability to learn lessons and apply them to the modern
problem. Considering why the result is derived is important to foster
this skill. Thus, the objective of our study is to foster this skill by
making learners consider why the result of historical event is reached.
In historical events, there are various relationships to lead the result.
In order to grasp reason of the result in the historical event, it is
necessary to understand essential relationships for satisfying condition
to establish the history. We propose a method to support understanding
necessarily relationships by creating a story. In this method, firstly
learners learn about relationships in the historical event. Secondly,
they create a similar story to the historical events. Finally, they
compare the historical event with the story and recognize necessarily
relationships. We are developing a system for supporting this method.
This method supports leaners creating the story by abstracting
character’s state. In creating the abstraction, it is important how
properties are set. If asset is set for a property, money cannot be set
because of asset includes a concept of money. Therefore, we need to set
some appropriate properties for future work. In addition, must develop
the support system.
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To foster Historical
Thinking Skill by
Creating Story
Necessary Relationships
and Elements of
Characters
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物語作成によるヒス
トリカルシンキング
スキルの育成

重要な関係と登場人
物の要素


To foster Historical
Thinking Skill by
Creating Story
Necessary Relationships
and Elements of
Characters
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←の”f”は大文字
1.
2.
To foster Historical
Thinking Skill by
Creating Story
Necessary Relationships
and Elements of
Characters

タイトルが二つ


タイトル1とタイトル
2の関連性が低い
1をスキル育成システ
ムの開発、2をサブタ
イトルにしてしまって
はどうでしょう
1.
2.
To foster Historical
Thinking Skill by
Creating Story
Necessary Relationships
and Elements of
Characters
Develop System of Fostering
Historical Thinking Skill
by Creating Story:
Necessary Relationships and
Elements of Characters

In historical learning,
historical thinking skill
is important. This
thinking is an ability to
learn lessons and apply
them to the modern
problem. Considering why
the result is derived is
important to foster this
skill. Thus, the
objective of our study is
to foster this skill by
making learners consider
why the result of
historical event is
reached.
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1~2文目

歴史学習では、ヒスト
リカルシンキングスキ
ルが重要である。これ
は授業で学んだことを
現代の問題に応用する
能力のことである。
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In historical learning,
historical thinking skill
is important. This
thinking is an ability to
learn lessons and apply
them to the modern
problem. Considering why
the result is derived is
important to foster this
skill. Thus, the
objective of our study is
to foster this skill by
making learners consider
why the result of
historical event is
reached.

3~4文目

歴史の結果が得られた
理由を考察することは
ヒストリカルシンキン
グスキルの育成に重要
である。よって、我々
の研究の目的はこのス
キルを学習者に歴史事
象がなぜその結果至っ
たかを考えさせること
により育成する事だ。

In historical learning,
historical thinking skill
is important. This
thinking is an ability to
learn lessons and apply
them to the modern
problem. Considering why
the result is derived is
important to foster this
skill. Thus, the
objective of our study is
to foster this skill by
making learners consider
why the result of
historical event is
reached.

3~4文目

reach
“結果”、”結論”に達す
るreachは他動詞
→目的語がいる


In historical learning,
historical thinking skill
is important. This
thinking is an ability to
learn lessons and apply
them to the modern
problem. Considering why
the result is derived is
important to foster this
skill. Thus, the
objective of our study is
to foster this skill by
making learners consider
why the result of
historical event is
reached.

3~4文目

reach
“結果”、”結論”に達す
るreachは他動詞
→目的語がいる


why the historical
event reached its
result.

In historical events,
there are various
relationships to lead the
result. In order to grasp
reason of the result in
the historical event, it
is necessary to
understand essential
relationships for
satisfying condition to
establish the history.
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5文目

歴史事象には、結果へ
至るための様々な関係
がある。

In historical events,
there are various
relationships to lead the
result. In order to grasp
reason of the result in
the historical event, it
is necessary to
understand essential
relationships for
satisfying condition to
establish the history.

6文目

歴史事象の結果の理由
を把握するには、歴史
をうち立てる条件に必
要な関係を理解するこ
とが必要である。

We propose a method to
support understanding
necessarily relationships
by creating a story. In
this method, firstly
learners learn about
relationships in the
historical event.
Secondly, they create a
similar story to the
historical events.

7文目

我々は物語作成によっ
て必要な関係を理解す
ることの支援方法を提
案する。

We propose a method to
support understanding
necessarily relationships
by creating a story. In
this method, firstly
learners learn about
relationships in the
historical event.
Secondly, they create a
similar story to the
historical events.

7文目
necessarily
→necessary


We propose a method to
support understanding
necessarily relationships
by creating a story. In
this method, firstly
learners learn about
relationships in the
historical event.
Secondly, they create a
similar story to the
historical events.

7文目

その前のパートから含
めて、歴史における重
要な関係は何と何のど
んな関係かがわからな
い

前の全体ゼミで話した
として省略するなら、5
文目で「様々な関係」→
「前の我々の論文で記
載したような様々な関
係」とする(?)

We propose a method to
support understanding
necessarily relationships
by creating a story. In
this method, firstly
learners learn about
relationships in the
historical event.
Secondly, they create a
similar story to the
historical events.

8~9文目

この方法では、まず学
習者は歴史事象におけ
る関係を学習する。次
に、歴史事象に似た物
語を作る。

We propose a method to
support understanding
necessarily relationships
by creating a story. In
this method, firstly
learners learn about
relationships in the
historical event.
Secondly, they create a
similar story to the
historical events.

8~9文目


create a story
similar to the
historical events.
similar toで一つの
形容詞のようです

Finally, they compare the 
historical event with the
story and recognize
necessarily relationships.
We are developing a
system for supporting
this method.
10~11文目

最後に、歴史事象と物
語を比較し、重要な関
係を認知する。我々は
この方法を支援するシ
ステムを開発している
ところだ。

Finally, they compare the 
historical event with the
story and recognize
necessarily relationships.
We are developing a
system for supporting
this method.
10~11文目

唐突なシステム

これもタイトルをシス
テム作成にしてしまえ
ば、少しましになるか
も?

This method supports
leaners creating the
story by abstracting
character’s state. In
creating the abstraction,
it is important how
properties are set. If
asset is set for a
property, money cannot be
set because of asset
includes a concept of
money. Therefore, we need
to set some appropriate
properties for future
work. In addition, must
develop the support
system.

12~13文目

この方法は登場人物の
状態を抽出することに
より学習者の物語作成
を支援します。抽象概
念の作成において、ど
のようにプロパティを
設定するかは重要であ
る。

This method supports
leaners creating the
story by abstracting
character’s state. In
creating the abstraction,
it is important how
properties are set. If
asset is set for a
property, money cannot be
set because of asset
includes a concept of
money. Therefore, we need
to set some appropriate
properties for future
work. In addition, must
develop the support
system.

12~13文目

前にシステムを作ると
書いたので、method
ではなく、サポートす
るのはsystemのほう
がよいのでは?

This method supports
leaners creating the
story by abstracting
character’s state. In
creating the abstraction,
it is important how
properties are set. If
asset is set for a
property, money cannot be
set because of asset
includes a concept of
money. Therefore, we need
to set some appropriate
properties for future
work. In addition, must
develop the support
system.

12~13文目

leaner→learner

This method supports
leaners creating the
story by abstracting
character’s state. In
creating the abstraction,
it is important how
properties are set. If
asset is set for a
property, money cannot be
set because of asset
includes a concept of
money. Therefore, we need
to set some appropriate
properties for future
work. In addition, must
develop the support
system.

12~13文目

What is important
in creating the
abstraction is how
properties are set.
(抽象概念の作成にお
いて大切なことはどの
ようにプロパティを設
定するかです)
としたほうが自然らし
いと書いてあるところ
も。

This method supports
leaners creating the
story by abstracting
character’s state. In
creating the abstraction,
it is important how
properties are set. If
asset is set for a
property, money cannot be
set because of asset
includes a concept of
money. Therefore, we need
to set some appropriate
properties for future
work. In addition, must
develop the support
system.

14~16文目

もし資産がプロパティ
として設定されたなら、
資産はお金の概念に内
包されているためお金
をプロパティとするこ
とはできない。した
がって、今後の仕事と
して適当なプロパティ
を決める必要がある。
加えて、サポートシス
テムを開発しなければ
ならない。

This method supports
leaners creating the
story by abstracting
character’s state. In
creating the abstraction,
it is important how
properties are set. If
asset is set for a
property, money cannot be
set because of asset
includes a concept of
money. Therefore, we need
to set some appropriate
properties for future
work. In addition, must
develop the support
system.

14~16文目

急にプロパティの例が
出てきた感がある

for exampleとかほし
いですかね

This method supports
leaners creating the
story by abstracting
character’s state. In
creating the abstraction,
it is important how
properties are set. If
asset is set for a
property, money cannot be
set because of asset
includes a concept of
money. Therefore, we need
to set some appropriate
properties for future
work. In addition, must
develop the support
system.

14~16文目

主語がない
 本題:
副題と書くのが正解
本題-副題 本題~副題~

 これらは×
A

A

is similar to B
AはBと同じ
is similar to B with C
AはBとCに関して同じ
 similar
冠詞theをとることはできず、aをとる
 完全一致でなく”似ている”というニュアンス

 same
必ずtheをつける
 完全一致のときのみ使用可能
